01-20-2014, 11:15 PM
"I'm taking my marbles and going home. Thanks people. I liked you. You didn't like me. Teletubbies offer advice about human interaction. "
I think everyone goes through disillusionment at some point, that you have gone through that us obvious, the rest: about how you feel about yourself, and the rapist seems unresolved, and thus makes the poem confusing. Critiquing your poem is not critiquing you, however whenever you write something that this this raw and fresh and personal, I don't see how you are going to be able to separate the two, and so you are going to take any negative comment about the poem as a negative comment about yourself. Seems like a real setup (probably unconsciously) on your part to generate rejection and give you a reason to run and hide. If that's what you want to do more power to you. The truth is you poem, that is the writing, is not very good, unfortunately what generated the poem is very significant to your personally. One does not equate to the other. Writing a poem that is only so-so just means you have not written many poem, that has no correlation to what you are writing about. You can flee the pig pen, as is your right, but I think I would look for more sound psychological help than the tel-tubies, but your right, we're here to give advice on poetry, not issues of psychology. That's the goal anyway, but it is also a free and open and society.
vio con dios,
Dale
I think everyone goes through disillusionment at some point, that you have gone through that us obvious, the rest: about how you feel about yourself, and the rapist seems unresolved, and thus makes the poem confusing. Critiquing your poem is not critiquing you, however whenever you write something that this this raw and fresh and personal, I don't see how you are going to be able to separate the two, and so you are going to take any negative comment about the poem as a negative comment about yourself. Seems like a real setup (probably unconsciously) on your part to generate rejection and give you a reason to run and hide. If that's what you want to do more power to you. The truth is you poem, that is the writing, is not very good, unfortunately what generated the poem is very significant to your personally. One does not equate to the other. Writing a poem that is only so-so just means you have not written many poem, that has no correlation to what you are writing about. You can flee the pig pen, as is your right, but I think I would look for more sound psychological help than the tel-tubies, but your right, we're here to give advice on poetry, not issues of psychology. That's the goal anyway, but it is also a free and open and society.
vio con dios,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.