01-20-2014, 06:07 AM
hello,
i'm unsure how to do this - i kindaa think i can, but when i do i get carried away with my own poems. here's part of a review i tried to write for the 2013 collection by simmons - drysalter.
maybe you won't make sense of what i'm asking til i found the technical terms ha......... the first term i just mean: when we expect a unstressed syllable and get a stressed. the second term is when: we expect a stressed syllable and get an unstressed (and).
i read it as
thanks for any help!
i'm unsure how to do this - i kindaa think i can, but when i do i get carried away with my own poems. here's part of a review i tried to write for the 2013 collection by simmons - drysalter.
Quote: “All-seeing-I saw ocular blood clots,
sun blemished skin and a broken heart.
Now wait while I spit out your mugshots.”
The automated insult and the poet's attitude to his "broken heart" do not jar, and so I am not convinced that he can use it can be the focal point of the poem. I am left wondering if I should read his heartbreak as melodramatic due to the TECHNICAL TERM of “blood”, or as unconvincing cynicism due to the TECHNICAL TERM of “and a broken”. It would be a rushed to claim that Simmons is able to harmonize such disparate elements through his imagination and clever use of expectation.
maybe you won't make sense of what i'm asking til i found the technical terms ha......... the first term i just mean: when we expect a unstressed syllable and get a stressed. the second term is when: we expect a stressed syllable and get an unstressed (and).
i read it as
Quote:All-seeing-I saw ocular blood clots,
sun blemished skin and a broken heart.
Now wait while I spit out your mugshots.
thanks for any help!