“Lucky” number seven. Edit 1

[Heartafire]

Your use of books soon becomes canvas, a piece of fabric for painting, perhaps you could reconcile that somehow. I like your use of simile. The piece does not excite or hold my attention (but with some effort). I think rowens is on spot, this needs to be worked with , I think you can turn this into something more stimulating and moving to the senses. I believe this ends here: But she gave me the world in silence.
Thank you for sharing this and good luck with it.
Best!
Heart