01-16-2014, 04:37 AM
(01-15-2014, 11:56 PM)oxomiya Wrote: I remember the timeI'm still learning form so someone else may have to comment on that aspect, but what I can say is to me personally the poem leaves me with a conflict intrigue and confusion.
Side by side we sat
You, me, and the angry sea
A sea-shell tossed back
And never found
I wait for you
To wash ashore
Somehow the poem leaves me intrigued and wanting more information but at the same time I am a little confused as I am not sure if I am reading about a lost love being likened to a seashell, or a literal prized sea-shell lost at sea.
I think its a good foundation, I think you could probably improve it a little.