The Embrace of Creation

[Mikeodial]

Hi Mikeodial, Your opening line needs to define 'what' is the ultimate connection with creation. Additionally, it is difficult to connect the dots between your lines throughout. Essentially, there is too much abstraction and no concrete images, visual similie or metaphor to connect the reader to your spiritual experience herein. I would add some imagery to your next edit. Cheers/Chris

Good point, I sort of watered this down. The original title was The Big O which leaves no one in doubt was this is talking about. Thanks for the input. Will modify as I see more input.