12-18-2013, 12:29 AM
(12-18-2013, 12:10 AM)oxomiya Wrote: I like the linesThanks for reading. Got one?
"Sheltered from the jingling tunes
until by text sent through the air:"
The layaway piece feels out of place. I think this would be a better poem without the first four lines. Nice work.
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