Dead Deer Flutter

[makeshift]

I don't know about the shape. The poem might work out better without it, as it has some nice ideas and images.

Is it one parent, or do you mean parents'? Do you mean whittles with an h? Is it giving more empty, or did you mean something else?

Thnx for the feedback, I had fun playing with the form, but in hindsight you may be right. It feels a bit unnecessary to me.

Yeah I meant parents' and whittles with an H. With the "giving more empty" I was trying to kind of perform the action being described in that stanza by making that sentence fragmented a bit. The stanza as a whole I really have problems with but still trying to work something out. I've updated the original post with the small grammar edits. I am working on a more complete edit. Thnnx again ^^