12-11-2013, 01:26 AM
Let me ask you this question then, let's just focus on one line, what is the value of this line break:
who, sympathizing with the
Breaking on weak words like "the" are almost never the best choice. I would encourage you to consider breaking on nouns and verbs for the most part. See if that doesn't strengthen the piece.
Just something to consider.
who, sympathizing with the
Breaking on weak words like "the" are almost never the best choice. I would encourage you to consider breaking on nouns and verbs for the most part. See if that doesn't strengthen the piece.
Just something to consider.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson