12-11-2013, 01:20 AM
(12-10-2013, 02:24 AM)milo Wrote:(12-10-2013, 02:15 AM)trailertrash Wrote:How do you believe the short lines affect the reading value?(12-09-2013, 05:49 PM)Speaktaboo Wrote: Love the tone on this. You set the scene really well. The two word lines kinda bother me. Maybe too many?'I know my form is shit... I don't plan on working on it.' -Speaktaboo
Remind you of anyone? Sorry, had to do it. I like the two word lines. Any chance you could you learn to live with them? They're important to me. Seriously, I'll take another look. Thanks for your remarks.
Also, how are you choosing your line breaks?
It is written as I would read it aloud. That is how the line breaks are chosen and how the reading value would be affected. I have no other explanation, quite honestly. Staccato sentences are a viable form of writing - maybe I haven't mastered it fully? It's kind of a judgemental/observational piece (just the facts, ma'am), wouldn't you agree? Thank you for your thought-provoking questions, I hadn't thought about it much before now.
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