12-11-2013, 01:08 AM
(12-10-2013, 07:21 PM)justcloudy Wrote: The bit about the heron and the alligator is so interesting once explained-- make it more explicit in the poem! "Heron" is such a nice word and knowing that alligator teeth were gnawing on the poor thing makes it more real. Just my thought. =]No worries. Feedback is both subjective and objective and I thank you for yours. My focus was gray - naturally, its definition would be a bit ambiguous. The heron and alligator may be another poem altogether . . .
-justcloudy
Oh and sorry for not being light enough. I tried. ;D
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