12-09-2013, 04:00 PM
Hello, this is an interesting piece. The name caught my eye, and I like how the first two lines are about going fast. Maybe you can go faster than a train? The "eyes closed" part I like. I can imagine closing my eyes, and feeling the speed. I didn't really get the Neil Armstrong on a horse thing though. He flew to the moon in a rocket! The second stanza starts off as if it's going to be a platform off of a looong drop, but it repeats the eye closing, then makes you wait. I like how you end it with a bang though.