Two For Alice (Edit #4 with punctuation)

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This is my first ever reply on this forum and I must say stuff like this is why I chose to join in the first place. I can't honestly give too much feedback on grammar and such (cause I kind of suck at it) but I can speak to how I'm affected and inspired by a piece. First of all I really enjoyed the duality represented by winter/spring and how the winter portion is not stereotypically cold or sad, there's more of a feeling of expectation of the coming warmth; the new life that spring breeds. Generally, I get a transitive feeling, the kind of universal boomerang where things come and go; especially from the lines "mom's favorites replanted" and "counting her pennies to buy what she can't let go". Overall, a wonderful poem!

Welcome, human,

I'm glad you enjoyed it, it was really fun to edit it here.

I'm learning to critique here too, and my grammar is improving, slooowly. Just jump in, if something strikes you as good or as off, let the poet know. Like anything else, you have to do it to learn it.

Thanks for your comments.