Cage

[hankabadpoet]

The first stanza has a wonderfully flowing rhythm to it, perhaps even a force rhyme between the words "strong" and "home". The last three stanzas seem to lack the rhythm the first established, I don't know if this was intentional but to me it seems like it cuts down on the readers ability for immediate comprehension. For instance the second stanza could read as:

The river's flow I followed,
with the strength of the suns brightest rays,
it led me to the imprisonment.
where my thoughts captured me,

Overall I did enjoy it!

Hank...