Susceptible to change

[heslopian]

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Young enough to notice change,
she softened the moment
with milk washed skin. "Milk" and "washed" should have a dash between them. Also, shouldn't there be a comma rather than a full stop here?
defined by her perfect silhouette,
a cameo brooch set in silver. Is this line needed?

I hid this creature rather well,
buried beneath story board Beano’s, Isn't "storyboard" one word? Also, as "Beanos" is being used in a plural context, an apostrophe isn't needed.
angry looks and desperate Dandy’s. Ditto.
My eyes now opened in a primeval light, Excellent line, beautifully conveying the dawn of sexuality. Rarely have I seen a boner described so well
reality catches me brutal as a dog bite.

Cheeks first reddened by rushed mouths
are held in trembling hands.
Medusa smiles as she turns me to stone,
my snakes begin to slither and roam YOUR snakes? Surely Medusa's the one with the snakes. Ending on the previous line would be stronger, I think.

I must admit, when I first read this I had no idea what it was about. Then when I read it again to start critiquing it dawned on me... You dirty bastard Just kidding. It's an elegant and really rather lovely evocation of adolescent sexual awakening. Critique is JMHO. Thank you for the read