Silent Night (It's not that funny so I'm moving it)

[Charlesjoseph]

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I think the tendency to use article and not use articles mixed together makes no sense at all. You certainly aren't being minimalist here so why do we get things like "wailing wife" and "stubbed-toe curse" without articles? Also, to the minimalism, there are so many adjectives and participle phrases and prepositional phrases here it needs to be stripped a bit.

Shit...maybe it is funny after all Should I move it back?
....yes,yes...you are right on your points, milo old bean!
This is condensate from one of my tragi-comedy short stories and as such is hopelessly over-cooked. The meter is running, of course, and I am not sure a rework would be worth the effort. Nonetheless, it is temporarily in Serious so I will heed your wise words as from a pressured pee-er (admit it, you missed the pot there, didn't you?

I did miss pe-er. interesting.
Very best,
tectak
PS British beer...grain, hops, water. Yahoo! ( I only drink whisky)

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All beer is hops grains and water. The grain statement was deliberate contrivance with no benefit - the hops was enough.

We could always go through the motions of work shopping this for fun, even if you don't intend to do anything with it.

In my mind grain is hard alcohol and hops are designated for beer.
so, beers and shots ...........old JIM bean!