11-20-2013, 08:03 PM
Syntax refers to the placement of words to form proper sentence structure in the English language. There are however varied but equally acceptable sentence structures, such as inverted vs standard. An example would be, " Mourn them do not. Miss them do not... The shadow of greed, that is.” If there is a legitimate syntax error (rather than simply not using standard) then highlight it or explain it. That's the entire point of the forum, which you seem to have missed.
I have worked very hard to learn how to compose a serious poem with all the new things I've learned, which is why I politely acknowledged your 'critique' and moved on rather than have my piece derailed by nonsense. I believe it's a solid piece that would benefit from serious oversight and guidance, which is why I posted it here. I have no issue being told that pieces of the poem don't work, or that it doesn't effectively communicate a message or theme. That's not what you did. What you did was be a smug twat. Nothing retracted. This is SERIOUS WORKSHOPPING, not big boy at the sandbox thrusts his groin.
I have worked very hard to learn how to compose a serious poem with all the new things I've learned, which is why I politely acknowledged your 'critique' and moved on rather than have my piece derailed by nonsense. I believe it's a solid piece that would benefit from serious oversight and guidance, which is why I posted it here. I have no issue being told that pieces of the poem don't work, or that it doesn't effectively communicate a message or theme. That's not what you did. What you did was be a smug twat. Nothing retracted. This is SERIOUS WORKSHOPPING, not big boy at the sandbox thrusts his groin.
If I could say only one thing before I die, it'd probably be,
"Please don't kill me"
"Please don't kill me"