Misanthropy

[SirBrendan]

I have read aloud the poem at least a hundred times and then some, so it's unnecessary to imply I just left my wet garbage at your door. Although I generally appreciate your candour (and I'd appreciate you to continue to give honest feedback), a facecheck out of the gate isn't all too pleasant. The syntax was a deliberate choice for both the metre and impression I wanted for the reading--clearly not an impression that sat well with you. I may simply lack the understanding, but I genuinely don't see any actual syntax-errors in the example stanza.

I'll make some punctuation revisions to try to clear up any untidiness.