Pic Poetry: Not pain, not nostalgia.
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(11-08-2013, 07:02 AM)newsclippings Wrote:  people will make you doubt that you’ve ever loved,
they do not want to admit that they
were stupid enough to fall for someone who
could crush them with 5 words.

I’ve been in love
yeah I’ve been
so, into a
love
that I lost it all, in grayed caves
I doubted reality
and became messy patchwork,
a half-truth, a blackened will.
I always love your work.

it's balanced. and real. and somehow inevitably true.

this is basically perfect. one tiny suggestion:

and became a messy patchwork,
of half-truths, and blackened will.

one way or another, I'm a fan.
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The howling beast is back.
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Messages In This Thread
Not pain, not nostalgia. - by newsclippings - 11-08-2013, 07:02 AM
RE: Not pain, not nostalgia. - by rowens - 11-08-2013, 08:41 AM
RE: Not pain, not nostalgia. - by newsclippings - 11-08-2013, 10:26 AM
RE: Not pain, not nostalgia. - by billy - 11-08-2013, 10:39 AM
RE: Not pain, not nostalgia. - by Charlesjoseph - 11-08-2013, 02:17 PM
RE: Not pain, not nostalgia. - by newsclippings - 11-09-2013, 06:50 AM
RE: Not pain, not nostalgia. - by justcloudy - 11-09-2013, 06:58 AM
RE: Not pain, not nostalgia. - by newsclippings - 11-09-2013, 07:16 AM
RE: Not pain, not nostalgia. - by violetdarling - 11-09-2013, 10:17 PM



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