11-07-2013, 06:14 AM
Hi Nick.
This is ok. You have some nice thoughts.
Didn't think the testes etc did much for it.
If you make your lines a bit longer the reader will have something to chew on. This is kinda just ideas and there isn't much to say because there isn't a lot here. Try narrowing down your thoughts and then saying things instead of suggesting them.
Like I said, nice ideas, just see if you can flesh them out a bit.
-justcloudy
This is ok. You have some nice thoughts.
Didn't think the testes etc did much for it.
If you make your lines a bit longer the reader will have something to chew on. This is kinda just ideas and there isn't much to say because there isn't a lot here. Try narrowing down your thoughts and then saying things instead of suggesting them.
Like I said, nice ideas, just see if you can flesh them out a bit.
-justcloudy
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