11-07-2013, 06:08 AM
this is touching tectak. something raw and bitter about it that I like.
had trouble with the rhythm throughout. the chunks are really nice but they don't quite fit together for me. lines 3-4 especially, and the last line--it feels too heavy, like it's dragging the rest down.
good starting point to have if you ask me!
had trouble with the rhythm throughout. the chunks are really nice but they don't quite fit together for me. lines 3-4 especially, and the last line--it feels too heavy, like it's dragging the rest down.
good starting point to have if you ask me!
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.