11-05-2013, 11:17 PM
(11-05-2013, 12:11 PM)billy Wrote: i like the idea behind the poem, (i love the moors) i just think you need to use more imagery instead of filler.Excellent advice. The hardest thing, I think, is to mix modern idiom with classical meter, which is why I end up sounding like a Queen Victoria wannabe
Cheers for your great feedback, Bilbo
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