Standing on the Moors

[milo]

The moors are filled with scenes like this:

For me, the deliberate inefficiency and passive voice make it read like a faux-victorian opening. I would think a more natural statement would be: Scenes like this fill the moors:" Also, Using the article makes me think of The Moors.

an open village caught between two hills;
beyond them lush and living greens abound,

I can't figure a purpose for "living" here. i certainly wouldn't assume lush dead greens if you excluded it.

among them rocks of coarse magnificence.
Bodies were sealed in this naked ground,

I wouldn't normally call out the Bodies /were/ sealed if it wasn't for the tense shift. The shift forces me to think, "what happened, did you dig them up?" Also, With all of the "between, among, and beyond, where is there room for the naked ground? it feels like you filled it right up with the prepositions.

a dance of ancient and sweet elegance
performed as one man with too many limbs.

I am always skeptical when I see double modification and especially with it being double modification of an abstraction. I have to think there would be some way to express this concretely without all the modification.

I can't quite visualize a dance performed as a man. i can visualize a dance as if performed by a man, but I am assuming this is not what you mean.

But now we are not those pagans and tribes,
we are the men of discovery's light,
the moors we stand on blind to human vibes.

I don't think you need "now" or "tribes". "vibes" feels oddly alien and slang for a pastoral/spiritual poem.

Thanks for posting.