Standing on the Moors

[ThePinsir]

The moors are filled with scenes like this:
an open village caught between two hills;
beyond them lush and living greens abound,
among them rocks of coarse magnificence.
Bodies were sealed in this naked ground,
a dance of ancient and sweet elegance
performed as one man with too many limbs.
But now we are not those pagans and tribes,
we are the men of discovery's light,
the moors we stand on blind to human vibes.

I'm not ever sure if I'm "qualified" to give feedback in Serious Workshopping. But here goes

-the first line only has 4 feet
-line 5 has 4.5 feet. from what I understand, 5.5 feet is fine. 4.5 isn't.