11-04-2013, 10:14 PM
Thank you very much for your in-depth analysis and critique, jdeirmaid, it's very helpful
I was aiming, overall, for iambic pentameter, but I may have tortured it a touch
The dancing was a funeral dance around the grave once the body had been buried.
I was aiming, overall, for iambic pentameter, but I may have tortured it a touch The dancing was a funeral dance around the grave once the body had been buried.
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