Primal
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(11-01-2013, 08:56 PM)jdvanwijk Wrote:  Sunday morning after breakfast,
it came to me like Jesus
from the cave: I must scream,
a cry to rival my dear ancestors
clubbing their dinner to death.

I took a deep breath;
that's when my brain kicked in.
Neighbours are a dreadful thing
when you're suffering from revelation,
especially when they sleep late.

Outside - the houses, the streets,
the cars, the parks,
the hedges, the lights:
on every horizon a guard
chaining us to modern times.
I really liked the imagery of the last stanza. Describes suburbia perfectly. I agree that all this mediocre ness is chaining us down
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Primal - by jdvanwijk - 11-01-2013, 08:56 PM
RE: Primal - by jdeirmend - 11-02-2013, 08:06 PM
RE: Primal - by jdvanwijk - 11-02-2013, 08:28 PM
RE: Primal - by milo - 11-03-2013, 12:18 AM
RE: Primal - by jdvanwijk - 11-03-2013, 01:09 AM
RE: Primal - by milo - 11-03-2013, 01:31 AM
RE: Primal - by jdvanwijk - 11-03-2013, 01:35 AM
RE: Primal - by milo - 11-03-2013, 01:42 AM
RE: Primal - by trueenigma - 11-03-2013, 03:12 AM
RE: Primal - by jdvanwijk - 11-03-2013, 03:26 AM
RE: Primal - by trueenigma - 11-03-2013, 03:40 AM
RE: Primal - by jdvanwijk - 11-03-2013, 03:42 AM
RE: Primal - by trueenigma - 11-03-2013, 05:30 AM
RE: Primal - by Keaner222 - 11-04-2013, 12:59 PM



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