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[milo]

Thanks, that's great advice and I will work on that. (I think some of the problems come from the fact I'm not a native speaker, in Dutch we say "on every horizon" for example... but that's what this forum is for of course. )

we say "over every horizon" or "from every horizon" in English and they are cliches referring to travel or different lands, hence the different horizons.

Hello Milo,

Thank you for your thorough feedback! A lot of things for me to consider. I'll try to explain some of things I intended, I'm curious if you would have any ideas to get these points across better?