A Child's Proof

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Ok--this will be my first post after reading quite a few and I have to admit I am a bit intimidated..nevertheless...points taken from above and your responses I can see a better flow coming to thie piece. The only additional feedback I could give is whether or not a a comma after this in the this is for you mama line would help break up the line slightly giving a subtle emphasis on the this is for you. Thanks for sharing!