10-29-2013, 01:07 AM
Thank you so much to SirBrendan and ThePinsir for these comments! I'm currently making edits and will probably have a new version up by the end of the day. The Cleopatra and Judas references were, as SirBrendan guessed, chosen because I thought they sounded cool. I'll do a little bit of self searching and figure out what would be a more natural way to restructure those lines. Thank y'all, once again, for the critique (and the kind words!).
