10-24-2013, 03:49 AM
I really liked "the sea, she is time" and think you could really expand on that metaphor more.
The last stanza is really cool. But, what are you "immersed" in??
The last stanza is really cool. But, what are you "immersed" in??
My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!