A Dark Mind

[Cyferz]

A little boy, a little girl
Run up a hill, and to a stream
To fill their cups with the stuff of dreams
The chaos sifts through torrent streams
A mind of lies and broken dreamsNo. Better to leave this rhyming thing alone. If stream, dream, streams, dreams is the best you can come up with, no wonder you get depressed

Wasn't going to say anything until this. There's this thing called alliteration; you might've learned about it in grade 10. All your other critiques are facetious at best. Also I don't know if you're familiar with a homonym but that is used here as well.

And it is more than one poem every ellipsis marks a new beginning, but the overall theme comes from the same place and it was written in chronological order.

There's a story here if you're skilled enough to see it. I'll give you a hint the muse is a girl, the voice is depression.