10-18-2013, 05:39 AM
(11-18-2011, 04:24 PM)grannyjill Wrote: Cupid Knows BestThis was rather good, could of used more imagery. And more personal input, to differentiate this poem from the other lovely cupid ones.
Why did Cupid’s arrow transfix my heart? Don't we all ask this haha
I don’t remember doing him a harm
Or casting doubts about his special charm. "Casting","charm" I like this little magical vocabulary.
So why attack me, why set me apart? Don't worry, you're not, his arrow gets everyone
Was I writ large upon his victim chart? Reads a bit weird
‘Let’s get this maid, and shatter all her calm’
I'm sure he said, and then drew back his arm Good
And through my battered heart he drove a dart. Good as well
Hm. You may say that love will bring me bliss.
That all the world rejoices at love’s dream. Reads weird
Perhaps, you’re right. My heart does strongly beat How strong?
Each time I feel his arms and taste his kiss.
Forgive me Cupid, you knew well your scheme
I bow and humbly kiss your winged feet. Clever
(This was written for another site where I am learning how to write sonnets....My homework? To write a sonnet about love abba abba (and choose cd cd cd, or cdc cdc or cde cde). I've posted it already so any tips would only be for help to me in the future ie I'm not cheating. ('winged' should be read as wingED)
I never highlight my flaws or deficits
Because none of that will matter when death visits
Because none of that will matter when death visits