10-17-2013, 10:09 PM
jdeirmend,
Thanks for your comments, I doubt you could be too harsh. I understand what you are saying, but to let you see Dido's pain and so forth would defeat the purpose of showing the hypocrisy of Love. The point is for Venus, the speaker, to be aloof and derisive, because this is what her actions in this situation suggest of her outlook, not just on Dido, but on all humans. Humanity is the plaything of Love. There are some other levels operative here, but that is the gist. To make it the poem you want, would be to make it a different poem. However, your comments, along with others makes me think I need to reevaluate how I am coming across. Evidently not the way I intend.
Dale
Thanks for your comments, I doubt you could be too harsh. I understand what you are saying, but to let you see Dido's pain and so forth would defeat the purpose of showing the hypocrisy of Love. The point is for Venus, the speaker, to be aloof and derisive, because this is what her actions in this situation suggest of her outlook, not just on Dido, but on all humans. Humanity is the plaything of Love. There are some other levels operative here, but that is the gist. To make it the poem you want, would be to make it a different poem. However, your comments, along with others makes me think I need to reevaluate how I am coming across. Evidently not the way I intend.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.