10-14-2013, 05:02 PM
Why is "Opulent" capped?
"because (the)taxi was (is) waiting." needs an article. Tense problem.
Not sure how "white opulent decadence" can swirl "between
sequined skirts of a modern Asian angel"
and why would "angle" (singular) have "skirts" plural?
And how does "white opulent decadence" swirl between "cheating Indian waiters with cheap
glasses of souring white wine."
Not am I sure what "white opulent decadence" is.
I kind of like
"I might even
rock my shoulders to the diaphragm
of your poetry"
although it really makes no sense.
I would really like to know what is the diaphragm of poetry.
I kind of feel like I have been to the place you are describing, emotionally and geographically, except I think you must have been on hallucinogens when you were thee.
Dale
"because (the)taxi was (is) waiting." needs an article. Tense problem.
Not sure how "white opulent decadence" can swirl "between
sequined skirts of a modern Asian angel"
and why would "angle" (singular) have "skirts" plural?
And how does "white opulent decadence" swirl between "cheating Indian waiters with cheap
glasses of souring white wine."
Not am I sure what "white opulent decadence" is.
I kind of like
"I might even
rock my shoulders to the diaphragm
of your poetry"
although it really makes no sense.
I would really like to know what is the diaphragm of poetry.
I kind of feel like I have been to the place you are describing, emotionally and geographically, except I think you must have been on hallucinogens when you were thee.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.