Between Rednecks annd Rappers

[tigrflye]

I'm stuck
between these rednecks and rappers who flood this scene,
no matter my efforts I'm stuck in this dream where lost in a dream ?
the flock of the people rallies at my feet where a flock of the people...
to hear my voice and to hear me come cleanto hear my voice and watch me come clean

But instead they want "fucks," and bitches to beat,But they only want..
to ride home at sunset with their tractors in tow,
They want a good blow, and to pop caps in a ho
the others to whine, about their dog and their doeI don't think you need this comma?

But the people they come, and the eat it all up they instead of the
no matter how bad it just fuggin' sucks.do you mean that no matter how bad you are, they eat it up anyway? If so, I would put a period after "bad." It will complete that thought and help the reader not try to make sense of "no matter how bad it just fucking sucks." as a sentence cuz I got tripped up.
But there is other places in this world for me,there ARE
places that I may want to be.
Right??

And here I am stuck
between hipster and emo...
with their Xstacy beats and their whispering screams
here they all come; the people to see
Where do I fit? What about me?

Fuck all you people
Fuck you whole lotFuck you a whole lot?
I don't need your approval
to make music that rocks.

Just some suggestions. Your poem.
Personal taste probably, but I don't like the emoticons in the actual poem. I want the words to tell me how to feel.. not the face
Haha
Glad you started writing again.