Venus

[jringo_]

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Great Dido, Love inflamed your passion, Amazing opening line
then caused the object of your affliction The enjambment causes a little confusion. Is the affliction Dido's fleeing?
to flee, over the sea, away from you, secretly.
Feeble Dido, not being able to stand the ache of his loss,Amazing turning line
you put a knife through it; then you crossed. And altogether great couplet
Did this bisection split you from your pain,"bisection" seems a word that goes against the rest of the poem, in terms of tone
as it removed you from your mortal frame?This rhyme in particular feels forced
Exquisite Love made poor Dido go insane.
How delicious, how apropos, how…loving!awkward ellipses

©2013 -Erthona

Overall, a lovely poem. Some rhymes feel forced. Perhaps consider putter this into complete iambic pentameter? You're almost there already. Perhaps some stanza breaks as well, for example the final two lines seem conclusitory (look ma, I made up a word!)