Was it?

[Malu]

Was it?

Sreech, skid, bang, crash, thump Screech*
Crumpled metal and shattered dreams Clever, crumple means to crush to become wrinkled and creased, crumble means to break apart into small fragments (usually over time) both work here, but in my opinion I think that crumble would work better with the rest of this poem
Screams of pain ,a voice forever silenced a little bit off with the comma
Shards of glass scattered in scarlet pools I liked this line a lot

Whisps of smoke smoke-o-whisp haha
fleeing skyward I got two interpretations from this, freedom! or loss of life? I wanna say freedom, since that makes more sense in this poem
trying in vain
to outrace the pain
left by one now absent structure wise sounds weird to me, possibly in need of a comma

Casts on arms and legs
Yet what can heal
a broken heart I suggest replacing heart with something that alludes to that meaning and conveys a deeper message
Replace a bright soul?

Falling tears, heartbreaking wails
thud of earth on casket
lowered for one final embrace
not of loved ones Structure wise, just sounds weird to me again
but
of
cold
dark
earth
I think the above five lines can be put into one or two lines, unless you wanted this to be direct and what not, either way is completely fine, just curious as to the reason behind this

And all because,
of temper unchecked
A desire to win!
The above two lines, I know exactly what you mean, been there, many times
Was it worth it...
Was it worth it?
Was it?
Good way to end this poem

All in all I enjoyed the imagery of the first part of this poem and the depth of explanation in the second half. I just made a few comments/suggestions, hope these help! Thanks for the read. Aaaaaaaand I just realized this is not the novice poet and critique, whoops I could of sworn I clicked on that forum, well yeah....