Equus Resurrection

[ChristopherSea]

Chris, this feels like it's going in the right direction. Seeing it written down I think I'd go recall over recalled. Okay, let me look at the rest of the lines.

Todd edit 1/version 2.0

I recalled her sun-sluiced silhouette
in dressage atop her chosen thoroughbred,--a instead of her. Cut down on the pronouns wherever you can without sacrificing clarity or tone.
as I navigated abrasive horsetails
and the stampeding memories
of when she corralled me in study hall
with that lengthy kiss which roped me in.

Not quite an Ivory Snow Girl,
her nature had elements of boot leather,--maybe condense had elements of to "was"
all saddle-soaped and snorting tannin.--really nice detail
With a tip of her helm and snap of riding crop,--I think you might need an "a" before riding
she’d flourish ribbons of her equestrian fetish,--crop gives you fetish already maybe conquests instead
deriding my pedestrian trail.
Was I suffering from horse envy?
Neigh, I’d whinny, deluding myself.

Bareback on prom night and 17-hands in heels,
she labored in peach chiffon, legs kicking beneath,
whipping up a bustle of geese and horse-feathers
to wing her off to college in migratory ‘V.’
Was it for Victory, Vaginal supremacy
or some mustang Vacillation
that cantered autumn so abstrusely?

I almost forgot this wild appaloosa,
her heel’s yoke, shank and rowel,
and how I was gelded that Christmas
(no longer her pet stable boy).
Memories virtually archeological,
except for wondering why I paused,
decades later, in that field of equisetum,
a scouring-grass that once ruled
the Paleozoic forest undergrowth,
yet today is the sole survivor
of its genus.

Though riddled with old nagging
memories and half-truths of horse-tales,
I found the rasping siliceous fingers
comforting now as I sat among them
and understood what it is like
to be a living fossil.


Todd edit 1/version 2.0 Thank you!
(Still working on the close, I may incorporate
the living fossil line into the stanza above)
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Good edit.

and I like those other suggestions, I'll re-edit, accordingly.

Looking at 'her nature was of bootleather' I found it very funny. It could work, I'll look at it again.