10-03-2013, 12:05 PM
(10-03-2013, 11:35 AM)Heslopian Wrote: "The heart of Bethlehem's beatin' in you",I really enjoyed this, it comes from a place I'm not used to ( I don't watch scary movies), and came across clearly.
he said as she flicked off a splash,
then wiped the blade on one of the Psalms. strong start
A window sayin' "shush..." with ratty curtains, I like the shush from the window
two leather chairs, a corpse in one, no light
except the sun, a litany of hairs I don't get the litany of hairs
from left to right, a door open behind.
"I love ya' daddy", says the girl, with cares with cares broke the flow for me
only for knives and God. Eighteen years
and not a day with mind for school or boys.
"That thing won't keep" he says, looking lightly chilling
at the whore, whose eyes don't leave the open door.
"You think he fucks her?" one kid asks his friend,
the voice a phantom in the darkened hall.
"Body or girl?" is his reply, munching. great ending
Thanks for the read.
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