Raped Dreams

[tectak]

Edit:
It feels so good to hate your face.
Sly Snake, the blame's on you.
This searing pain that launched into
my ribs and sliced me through. no period, surely?
This worthless heart. Its robust beat
I heaved into your hand.
You closed your fist around its glow
and turned the blood to sand.

Forgive you? Ha! You retched beast. Wretched?
For you I've no reprieve.
Displayed, I'm burning while you watch.
Your guilt is no relief.
I'd kick your teeth into your nose
to show you how to cry.
I hope she rapes your dreams and spits
into your lying eyes.
I wish there was more wrong with this because I rather wish I had written it
I am sure that there is a genre here. What shall we call it... ? Good consistency throughout and a succinct edit.Yes to this

Original:
It feels so good to hate your face.
Sly Snake, the blame's on you.
This searing pain that launched into my ribs
and sliced me through.
This worthless heart. Its robust beat
I heaved into your hand.
You closed your fist around its glow
and turned the blood to sand.

Forgive you? Ha! You retched beast.
I have you no reprieve.
Displayed, I'm burning while you watch.
Your guilt is no relief.
I'd kick your teeth into your nose
to show you how to cry.
I hope she rapes your dreams
and spits into your lying eyes.

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