Brunch (For fun)

[tectak]

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If cannibalism was not a sin,
I could devour your cinnamon skin.Already confection...this is delicious
Rich scents are tickling my nose,
Tongue dipping in between your toes. There is no contemporary requirement to capitalise every line. It is only confusing and was never of any real use. Pseudo poets still do it. You are not a pseudo poet.
Teeth scraping up behind your knee,
Could dunk you in an English tea.
Your fingertips are sweet corn bread,
Clouding reason in my head. Though I can follow your thinking I believe this line is a sacrifice to the god of rhyme. There must be a better linkage than this. Your poem
Your whiskey mouth has made me weak.
I nibble softly on your cheek. Though unobtrusive in the general way of things poetic, the simplistic rhyming is getting mantra-like. The occasional enjambment may help to break step before resonance causes the thing to shake itself to bits. No more mention of this except that the poem may, just may, be getting too long.
I know I can't resist that ear.
Thank God your tasty shoulder's near.
I don't draw blood; no, not this time.
Ingesting you would be a crime.
I guess that I should also add
Killing you would make me sad.
The problem that I have, you see,
Is wanting all of you in me.Concept-confidence throughout. It dances along. I can read it as a child with a gingerbread man or a young and passionate woman in lust. Either way, I love your punctuation...and I don't say that often.
Well done.
Best,
tectak

Original:
I could devour your delicious skin
If cannibalism was not sin.
Rich scents are tickling my nose,
Tongue dancing in between your toes.
Teeth scraping up inside your knee,
I would eat you with an English tea.
Your fingertips are sweet corn bread,
Clouding reason in my head.
Your whiskey mouth has made me weak.
I nibble softly on your cheek.
I know I can't resist your ear.
Thank God your tasty shoulder's near.
I don't draw blood but I want to
Greedily ingest all of you.
I suppose that I should also add
That killing you would make me sad.
The problem that I have, you see,
Is wanting all of you in me.