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Brunch (For fun)

Brunch (For fun)
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#19
09-30-2013, 05:50 AM
Vanilla might have slight sexual connotations so would work with your ending. It's more concrete than either of the d words--so an improvement.

Okay, okay, that was long-winded for I like it. Smile
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Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-29-2013, 05:09 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by billy - 09-29-2013, 09:11 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-29-2013, 09:24 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by billy - 09-29-2013, 10:49 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Versify - 09-29-2013, 11:12 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-29-2013, 12:13 PM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by billy - 09-29-2013, 03:33 PM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-29-2013, 03:53 PM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Todd - 09-29-2013, 07:44 PM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tectak - 09-30-2013, 01:45 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-30-2013, 02:05 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by milo - 09-30-2013, 02:43 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-30-2013, 03:29 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by milo - 09-30-2013, 03:51 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Leanne - 09-30-2013, 04:46 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-30-2013, 05:18 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Todd - 09-30-2013, 05:20 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-30-2013, 05:46 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Todd - 09-30-2013, 05:50 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Leanne - 09-30-2013, 05:54 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by milo - 09-30-2013, 05:56 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Todd - 09-30-2013, 05:56 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Todd - 09-30-2013, 05:58 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-30-2013, 06:22 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by milo - 09-30-2013, 06:29 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Leanne - 09-30-2013, 06:27 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Leanne - 09-30-2013, 06:35 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by milo - 09-30-2013, 06:48 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Todd - 09-30-2013, 06:36 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-30-2013, 06:39 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Leanne - 09-30-2013, 06:42 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Leanne - 09-30-2013, 06:50 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-30-2013, 06:56 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by Leanne - 09-30-2013, 06:58 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by billy - 09-30-2013, 09:31 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tigrflye - 09-30-2013, 09:33 AM
RE: Brunch (For fun) - by tectak - 09-30-2013, 06:59 PM



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