09-30-2013, 03:29 AM
Milo,
Thank you for your reply. I am not "familiar" or overly comfortable with meter, although we have been introduced.
I was going for a loose rythm, rather than a strict meter..admittedly because it was easier considering the rhyme constriction.
Some great poets have made it work (rhyme without meter) .. Sylvia Plath's Daddy has a changing meter. Please don't think I would ever compare myself. I'm not. And if it doesn't work, well it doesn't work.
Would you suggest step-one in the clean up process be breaking the poem apart and adopting a meter?
Thank you for your reply. I am not "familiar" or overly comfortable with meter, although we have been introduced.
I was going for a loose rythm, rather than a strict meter..admittedly because it was easier considering the rhyme constriction.
Some great poets have made it work (rhyme without meter) .. Sylvia Plath's Daddy has a changing meter. Please don't think I would ever compare myself. I'm not. And if it doesn't work, well it doesn't work.
Would you suggest step-one in the clean up process be breaking the poem apart and adopting a meter?