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(09-22-2013, 01:26 AM)OliverPorano Wrote:  helplessness is blind
the symphony of consciousness
stops in the air
with the mad chatter
of unseen audiences
Hi, Oliver. I'm curious about why you used blind instead of deaf when the rest of the poem uses audio references. If you meant to make me stop to figure it out you succeeded. I enjoyed "the mad chatter
of unseen audiences"

Thanks for the read.
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Unititled - by OliverPorano - 09-22-2013, 01:26 AM
RE: Unititled - by ellajam - 09-25-2013, 03:39 AM
RE: Unititled - by OliverPorano - 09-25-2013, 08:08 AM
RE: Unititled - by mortal - 09-25-2013, 05:08 AM
RE: Unititled - by leftover sushi - 09-25-2013, 11:12 AM
RE: Unititled - by Malu - 10-07-2013, 01:59 PM
RE: Unititled - by jringo_ - 10-12-2013, 03:20 AM
RE: Unititled - by RyanRader13 - 10-12-2013, 03:33 AM
RE: Unititled - by tectak - 10-14-2013, 10:58 PM
RE: Unititled - by Erthona - 10-14-2013, 11:20 PM
RE: Unititled - by alatos - 10-17-2013, 05:09 AM



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