Night Out

[Wjames]

These kinds of poems you've been writing are growing with you. With the first two lines, I was thinking it was going to go somewhere with both a train and a train of thought. I missed a train of thought when I stopped to think; that's interesting. Did you mean to do what you did with Sleep and finished, instead of slept? It's not incorrect the way you have it, depending on how you read it. At least not for me. But what was your idea with that?

I like the ring of:

Sleep on a bench
finished the night.

With Slept:

Slept on a bench
to finish the night.

The narrator didn't sleep specifically "to" finish the night, and you have to sort of use "to" with slept.