09-13-2013, 09:16 AM
Lineman;
your poem is nicely written, but I must echo what others have already said. It's the subject matter that no longer excites this reader; most of us are aware of this perpetual state of affairs with no end in sight. Unfortunately, you have added no new twist that could make the poem different from the same old litany that my old neighbor recites to his captured audience--me. (On other forums, I have encountered too many poems that expressed the same message, and because of those reoccurring rants I prefer to abstain from writing preachy or moralizing poems of that sort.) I won't say that political poems and rants are off the table, but they must offer new insight on an old theme.
Regards,
Jerry
your poem is nicely written, but I must echo what others have already said. It's the subject matter that no longer excites this reader; most of us are aware of this perpetual state of affairs with no end in sight. Unfortunately, you have added no new twist that could make the poem different from the same old litany that my old neighbor recites to his captured audience--me. (On other forums, I have encountered too many poems that expressed the same message, and because of those reoccurring rants I prefer to abstain from writing preachy or moralizing poems of that sort.) I won't say that political poems and rants are off the table, but they must offer new insight on an old theme.
Regards,Jerry