Two For Alice (Edit #4 with punctuation)

[ChristopherSea]

Thanks Chris, great points. I'm looking forward to editing, something I haven't done during this current run of poetry. I'm excited, thanks all.

I've a question: This was written with the notion of tanka 5,7,5,7,7. Any opinion as to whether it would wreck it to stray from that form or should I make sure to stay within it on edit?

Sorry, I did not pick up up on the form! You could try to stick with it, as that was your intent and you should always have the final say.