09-10-2013, 05:40 PM
i like how the poem transitions from one of death or emptiness to one of life or living. the winter summer works well in helping the concept of them both. some good images and the story within the poem is warm instead the usual cold poems of life and death bring. the house comes alive again and it seems so does the daughter. i enjoyed the read.
(09-10-2013, 07:22 AM)ellajam Wrote: Winter
your empty house sits
snuggled in its same footprint good image for a home
porches forming wings
as if it could glide across
the lake's reflection, soaring
half glassed for winter
half screened to catch summer's breeze
your home held your soul
cradled it during your stay
released it to soar in joy not sure about sour and souring in the same shortish poem
Spring
Alice's daughter
has planted geraniums
in window boxes
her mother's home wakes from sleep
great-grandchildren wade the shore
counting her pennies
to buy what she can't let go
Alice's daughter
breathes new life into the void
replanting mom's favorites