Hale

[Malu]

If this is:
And it's where My Heart calls Home

then you should be able to do a lot more than this effort. You were there, give me some specifics. Drop the poetry and think like a fiction writer. How would you describe home? In what is essential to this being home, you will find the poetry, and that poetry will be your words.

a thought,
Bill

Thanks for the constructive feedback!