Hale

[Malu]

You can build your own poem.

Other people might see something more than I do in what you have here. But I see nothing but trite utterances after the first stanza. The first stanza is sort of trite too, but at least it sounds pretty.

I know I can build my own poem, thanks for the reminder. But help is what would be appreciated. If you don't see anything in this poem then I'm confused as to why you would choose to comment on it, of all the threads out there. And I find it funny you find the second part overused when you I think you don't even know what some of the words mean.