empty child

[in-need-of-an-empire]

I personally liked the vulgarity. i find that there is often too much emphasis on it being a "bad" word. when in truth, sometimes there is no word that better displays the exact feeling. i will say, that since there is only one, however, it may not be the best option. if you were to revise this poem and "cuss it up" just a bit, then the F-word would fit better. all in all though it felt very sincere. which would be hard to maintain if you cussed it up. but i liked it.